8 thoughts on “News

  1. This one is better, the diction and the mystery of it is awesome. It grabs the throat. The other is more open and obvious, if it where a monster it wouldn’t be a monster in the dark, and we all know monsters in the dark are scareir

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    • After I’d posted the second version I read it over again and it sounded like a saying, something sympathetic you might repeat to a worried parent, whereas this version sounds more like true haiku, where you must imagine so much. Yet the other is liked more — as you say, more open and obvious.

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