rose petals falling
I wish you were here
to hold me
when pink turns to blue
.
Attempt at a 5,5,3,5 haiku
as explained by Ron at Haiku Odyssey
rose petals falling
I wish you were here
to hold me
when pink turns to blue
.
Attempt at a 5,5,3,5 haiku
as explained by Ron at Haiku Odyssey
The word I reserve for haiku that are exceptional is EXQUISITE, and this one *IS*!! It doesn’t exhibit the problems of “flatness” in any way. *standing ovation*
Ron
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I’ll take a bow then, and throw my faithful mentor/critic a rose from the bouquet. 🙂
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You are the one who deserves the bouquet! *graciously accepting the flowers and holding out to you a box of “Pangburn’s Millionaires” — born in Fort Worth,Texas* in 1914!
http://www.russellstover.com/jump.jsp?itemType=CATEGORY&itemID=6
http://www.russellstover.com/jump.jsp?itemType=CATEGORY&itemID=187
*My birthplace where I have lived almost continuously my entire life…and where I have eaten Pangburn Millionaires proudly any time I can!
Enjoy!
Ron
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Yum!
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I LOVE this one. Perfect.
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Thank you. Once in a blue moon we poets hit the right note. 🙂
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Oh I dare say we get it right more often than that–I’m enjoying your posts.
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Pink turns to blue 🙂
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