3 thoughts on “Dreams

  1. Intriguing and satisfyingly ambiguous with either of the possibilities below due to the usual lack of punctuation, which I supplied only to clarify the two possibilities:

    (1) I must go on —
    To find the dreams I laid away
    you must dream again

    (2) I must go on
    to find the dreams I laid away —
    You must dream again,

    Very nice!

    Ron

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  2. One capital letter…but a world of misreading has been prevented. Truthfully though. I think everyone would have read it as it is now even without the capital letter. In any case, it’s a lovely haiku with two of the best lines (L2, L3) I have ever read. Definitely mark this one for inclusion in your first book!

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