Oooooh nice! I like the unresolved ambiguity!! Who or what is in the shadows “reaching” for the subject of the verse? Really brings the reader into the haiku rather than just reading it! Now that’s haiku!! 🙂
So glad it pulls you into the scene! I wanted to leave the open feeling of all the shadows “reaching” as well as leaving the “you” unclear among the shadows.
Well, maybe I’ll skip the puns for awhile and try for more classics. 🙂 At least I wish more of my haiku would make me “feel the moment” like this one did.
Oooooh nice! I like the unresolved ambiguity!! Who or what is in the shadows “reaching” for the subject of the verse? Really brings the reader into the haiku rather than just reading it! Now that’s haiku!! 🙂
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So glad it pulls you into the scene! I wanted to leave the open feeling of all the shadows “reaching” as well as leaving the “you” unclear among the shadows.
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To repeat (and why not?!) — This one is classic haiku! (Well, I didn’t exactly repeat, but close enough!)
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Well, maybe I’ll skip the puns for awhile and try for more classics. 🙂 At least I wish more of my haiku would make me “feel the moment” like this one did.
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Observe reflectively — Read haiku of the great masters — Write, write, edit, edit, edit , edit!!
Repeat As Necessary.
🙂
Ron
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