4 thoughts on “Cherry Tree

      • Just one man’s opinion but since you asked. The word “producing” seems so “industrial”

        How about:

        cherry tree miracle
        blossoms spring out with another
        crop of poems

        I would drop “in spring” as unnecessary since that’s when blossoms would be expected. Also, I worked in “spring” obliquely in L2. Other changes just seemed better to my ears! *g*

        Hope you liked the bicycle senryu I wrote for you! *hehehehe*

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