My version below isn’t intended as an improvement but just as a way to include more imagery and make your father (?) more real through something he wore.
scrubbing his headstone —
the smell of his weathered gloves
erases the years
Beautiful slightly cool day here…just the kind of day I love to watch the yardmen mow our jungle! *hehe*
Sublime! (I’m trying not to use “poignant”!)
My version below isn’t intended as an improvement but just as a way to include more imagery and make your father (?) more real through something he wore.
scrubbing his headstone —
the smell of his weathered gloves
erases the years
Beautiful slightly cool day here…just the kind of day I love to watch the yardmen mow our jungle! *hehe*
Ron
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